How's this for a start? At least 5 comments plz!?

Well! Boy, do you have an interesting idea here! However, I feel that you need to have more research on writing itself- It shows. Your grammar is incorrect ( google writing tips, grammar, etc.) You definitely need more detail in there, and the way you approach things is almost mechanical. I have the feeling that Jane knew from the start she was gonna be taken. This is not how a normal person thinks! She starts of introducing her family, which is also unnatural. She should describe the characters as they appear. By describing Rick, we know from the start she's gonna be taken by him. She should describe Rick when she realizes she was kidnapped by him. Like, "Why didn't I see this sooner?!" and then she could describe how his behavior is odd, etc. But you didn;t create any of the intended tension. Sorry, but it's true. When you fix your errors, email it! I would love to see how this story turns out!